At last, I can tell the story of last weekend.

2013-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 Sheela

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1 AS 2 LIKE? 1. He is very much __2_ his brother. 2. She likes him __1_ a friend. 3. He wanted to work __2_ a journalist. 4. I'm tired. I've been working __1_ a dog. 5. They went to the party __2_ boyfriend and girlfriend Wow. I really appreciate that I can tell you the story of last weekend. Maybe I wrote down the letter enthusiastically, because I look forward to writing this story. Last week, The movie of Jun-ho Bong was released. So we ran into a theater. and bought two ticket. Until the movie started, we stayed at game room. The game machines are there. so we looked around that place, and we found a toy crane!! I had a experience to catch some dolls. I put in the money and enjoyed playing. and I got doll at two times!! and we watched movie. yes, It was great. but we talked all day about the doll which I caught . I was happy!! I will tell you about the story of movie next time bye~

강사 첨삭

Hello there,

Please, check the necessary corrections that I have made.

It is a great thing that you have time to have some fun and watch a movie.^^

I will wait for your stories.

See you in class!

Have a nice day ahead!!!!

T. Nina^^

1 AS 2 LIKE? 

1. He is very much __2_ his brother.

>>correct

2. She likes him __1_ a friend.

>>correct

3. He wanted to work __2_ a journalist.

>>like

4. I\'m tired. I\'ve been working __1_ a dog.

>>like

5. They went to the party __2_ boyfriend and girlfriend

>>as

 Wow.

>>correct

Or>>Wow!

I really appreciate that I can tell you the story of last weekend.

>>I am really happy that I can tell you a story about my activity last weekend.

Maybe I wrote down the letter enthusiastically, because I look forward to

writing this story.

>>Correct! OR I am looking forward to writing a letter enthusiastically.

Last week, The movie of Jun-ho Bong was released.

>>The movie of Jun-ho Bong was released last week.

So we ran into a theater. and bought two ticket.

>>So, we ran to the theater and bought two tickets.

Until the movie started, we stayed at game room.

>>We stayed at the game room until the movie started.

The game machines are there.

>>There are a lot of game machines in there.

so we looked around that place,

and we found a toy crane!!

>>We looked around and found a toy crane.

I had a experience to catch some dolls.

>>I had an opportunity to catch/get some dolls. 

I put in the money and enjoyed playing.

>>I dropped some money and enjoyed playing the game.

and I got doll at two times!!

>I got two dolls.^^

and we watched movie. yes, It was great.

>>Then we watched the movie and it was great.

but we talked all day about the doll which I caught .

>>We talked about the dolls I got for the whole day.

I was happy!!

>>correct

I will tell you about the story of movie next time

bye~

>>I will tell you something about the story of the movie next time.

Goodbye!!!

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