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If your company is like most others, you have smart pople doing many smart things. But there are stupid procedures that mostly restrict their potentials. Just such a part is for us to do.Our Niku helps to expose your ability in the maximum by contructing business S/W fit to the requests of your company. Our s/w program will support for employee to work smartly. It enables for employes to share opinions rapidly and find informations, deploy the resource and overtake projects suited to the budget timely. How smart is that ? Scientist makes theory about the cause of aging but nobody makes evidence of cause. Aging rate of one species according to the aging theory is predetermined by genes. Genes determine the life of cell.If the cell dies,organ of the lives is not controlled, finally, it doesnot maintain biological functions necssary to keep life. Ac cording to free radical theory, cell gets to be old by chemical reaction in cell. this brings ultimately harm of cell and aging.
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If your company is like most others, you have smart pople doing many smart things.
>>If your company is similar with other companies, you\'ll have a lot of smart people to do things.
But there are stupid procedures that mostly restrict their potentials.
>>But there are unnecessary protocols that most of the time restrict them to express their potentials.
Just such a part is for us to do.
>>That part is our job.
Our Niku helps to expose your ability in the maximum by contructing business S/W fit to the requests of your company.
>>Our Niku helps you to express your maximum ability by constructing S/W businesses that would fit the requests of your company.
Our s/w program will support for employee to work smartly.
>>Our S/W program will support the employees in working smartly.
It enables for employes to share opinions rapidly and find informations, deploy the resource and overtake projects suited to the budget timely.
>>It enables the employees to share their opinions, find pieces of information, deploy its resources and overtake projects suited to the budget in time.
How smart is that ? Scientist makes theory about the cause of aging but nobody makes evidence of cause.
>>How smart is that? Scientists make theories about the causes of aging but nobody makes evidence of its cause.
Aging rate of one species according to the aging theory is predetermined by genes.
Genes determine the life of cell.
>>The aging rate of one specie acoording to the aging theory is predetermined by genes, and genes determine the life of a cell.
If the cell dies,organ of the lives is not controlled, finally, it doesnot maintain biological functions necssary to keep life.
>>If the cell dies, organs are not controlled and finally, it will not maintain biological functions that are necessary to keep life.
Ac cording to free radical theory, cell gets to be old by chemical reaction in cell. this brings ultimately harm of cell and aging.
>>According to free radical theory, a cell gets old by chemical reactions in it, this brings a major harm to the cell and its aging.
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