Attending a concert
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I am not sure if attending a concert is worth the ticket price. For some people, the chance of attending a concert is a healing or refreshing time. Still,I don\'t think the prices are reasonable. Recently, the concert ticket prices of K-pop bands are rising up to 250000. It\'s a severe burden to the most fans.
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Hi, Gi [이름]!
I couldn’t agree more. Like we discussed in class, it’s still a wonder to me how people can afford expensive ticket prices and how willing they are to spend their money on concerts. Maybe I’m just being practical in thinking that the same amount of money could be used for other necessities rather than a concert ticket. But still, that’s their money, and they can spend it however they want.
- T. Caitlyn
I am not sure if attending a concert is worth the ticket price.
>> CORRECT
For some people, the chance of attending a concert is a healing or refreshing time.
>> For some people, attending a concert is a healing or refreshing experience.
Still, I don\'t think the prices are reasonable.
>> CORRECT
Recently, the concert ticket prices of K-pop bands are rising up to 250000.
>> Recently, concert ticket prices for K-pop bands have risen up to 250,000.
It\'s a severe burden to the most fans.
>> It’s a heavy burden for most fans.
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