August 4, Homework

2020-08-06 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

ESSAY: Scientists have been warning for many years already that in order to protect the environment people should use less energy. However, most people do not change their ways of living. What is causing this behavior? How can people be encouraged to change? Yes, right. Most people use a lot of energy every day. In case of Korean, it is a very serious problem as like other countries. These day’s global warming is due to CO2, a lot of CO2 is made from fossil fuel. People use large amount of fossil fuel to make electric energy. Global warming is a big problem that earth should solve. People must reduce to use large energy consumption and government have to campaign to reduce energy consumption. If there is no effect, government have to force the people to reduce their energy consumption. Carbon tax is a good policy’s example to reduce energy consumption.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Sir James~! ^^ Thanks for doing your homework. I appreciate your ideas and expressions regarding the topic. Keep it up and Have a good time~! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Yes, right. Most people use a lot of energy every day.
>>> CORRECT
 In case of Korea, it is a very serious problem as like other countries. 
>>> CORRECT
These day’s global warming is due to CO2, and a lot of CO2 is made from fossil fuel. 
>>> CORRECT
People use a large amount of fossil fuel to make electric energy. 
>>> CORRECT
Global warming is a big problem that the world should solve.
>>> CORRECT
 People must reduce using large energy consumption and governments have to campaign reducing energy consumption.
>>> CORRECT
 If there is no effect, governments have to force the people to reduce their energy consumption. 
>>> CORRECT
Carbon tax is a good policy’s example to reduce the energy consumption.
>>> CORRECT

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