August 8, Homework
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강사 첨삭
Good afternoon Jun!
Thank you for sparing some time to write an essay for our essay homework yesterday.
I agree that desktop computers will become less popular in the next months or years to come because of the massive development in technology.
People want to do things in a convenient way so it\'s just natural for them to gravitate towards the use of smartphones and tablet PCs.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing alright.
See you in class later. :)
~Charry
Subject : Do you think the desktop computer is going to become less popular in the future? if so, what will replace it ? Please explain your answer in not more than ten (10) sentences.
I thnks, Desktop computer will be getting less popular because developted technology.
>> I think the desktop computer will be getting less popular because of the developed technology.
long time ago, super computer worked to process a lot of datas but we don\'t need a super computer anymore due to advanced technology.
>> Long time ago, super computers worked to process a lot of data but we don\'t need a super computer anymore due to the advanced technology.
And there are a lot of thing can be replaced desktop computer.
>> In addition, there are a lot of things that can replace a desktop computer.
most people have smartphone and tablet. and its specification is almost similar to computer.
>> Most people have a smartphone and a tablet and their specifications are almost similar to a computer.
So we can play high quality game with smartphone and we can make a report with tablet PC.
>> So we can play a high quality game with a smartphone and we can make a report with a tablet PC.
At office, many people use a their laptop which received from company.
>> At the office, many people use their laptops which they received from their companies.
So, my answer for above question is that desktop computer will be getting less popular.
>> So, my answer for the above question is that a desktop computer will be getting less popular.
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