August 8, Homework

2019-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Subject : Do you think the desktop computer is going to become less popular in the future? if so, what will replace it ? Please explain your answer in not more than ten (10) sentences. I thnks, Desktop computer will be getting less popular because developted technology. long time ago, super computer worked to process a lot of datas but we don\'t need a super computer anymore due to advanced technology. And there are a lot of thing can be replaced desktop computer. most people have smartphone and tablet. and its specification is almost similar to computer. So we can play high quality game with smartphone and we can make a report with tablet PC. At office, many people use a their laptop which received from company. So, my answer for above question is that desktop computer will be getting less popular.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon Jun!
Thank you for sparing some time to write an essay for our essay homework yesterday.

I agree that desktop computers will become less popular in the next months or years to come because of the massive development in technology.

People want to do things in a convenient way so it\'s just natural for them to gravitate towards the use of smartphones and tablet PCs.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing alright.
See you in class later. :)
~Charry


Subject : Do you think the desktop computer is going to become less popular in the future? if so, what will replace it ? Please explain your answer in not more than ten (10) sentences.

I thnks, Desktop computer will be getting less popular because developted technology.

>> I think the desktop computer will be getting less popular because of the developed technology.

long time ago, super computer worked to process a lot of datas but we don\'t need a super computer anymore due to advanced technology.

>> Long time ago, super computers worked to process a lot of data but we don\'t need a super computer anymore due to the advanced technology.
And there are a lot of thing can be replaced desktop computer.

>> In addition, there are a lot of things that can replace a desktop computer.

most people have smartphone and tablet. and its specification is almost similar to computer.

>> Most people have a smartphone and a tablet and their specifications are almost similar to a computer.

So we can play high quality game with smartphone and we can make a report with tablet PC.

>> So we can play a high quality game with a smartphone and we can make a report with a tablet PC.

At office, many people use a their laptop which received from company.

>> At the office, many people use their laptops which they received from their companies.
So, my answer for above question is that desktop computer will be getting less popular.

>> So, my answer for the above question is that a desktop computer will be getting less popular.

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