Australian men and women
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Hi Ye [이름]!
You are completely right.
We can\'t put our lives on hold.
Let\'s continue working hard.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The given chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women who did a regular physical
activity in 2010.
>> The given chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The graph is divided into six age groups from 15 to 65 and over.
>> Correct
Through this graph,
people can know the differences in doing regular physical activity between men and women.
>> Through this graph, people can know the differences in the percentage of men and women doing physical activity.
The highest percentage was 53.3% in the female 45 to 54 age group.
>> Correct
There was a small gap between the
female age groups of 35 to 44 and 55 to 64.
>> Correct
The lowest percentage was 39.5% in the male 35 to 44 age
group which was the only percentage below 40% out of the whole percentages.
>> The lowest percentage was 39.5% in the male 35 to 44 age group which was the only percentage below 40% out of all the percentages.
Overall, men’s trend shows that it was downwards from 15 years old to 44 years old,
>> Overall, there\'s a downward trend for men from 15 years old to 44 years old.
however, it
reversed from 45 years old to over 65 years old to onwards.
>> However, it is the reverse from 45 years old to over 65 years old.
Oppositely, women’s trend shows that the
percentages was going up until the age group of 45 to 54, while it was going down as the women get
older.
>> On the other hand, the trend for women shows that the percentages were going up until the age group of 45 to 54, while they were going down as the women got older.
The women did the regular physical activity than the men in most of the age groups in 2010,
except the age group of 15 to 24.
>> The women did more regular physical activity than the men in most of the age groups in 2010, except the age group of 15 to 24.
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