bad practice
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How would you like to see your culture evolve? What aspects do you believe need improvement, and why?
>>> As I told you about korean honorifics, I want unjust social practices to be eliminated. The most serious practice is relationship between senior and [이름]ior. This relationships can be easily seen in work. Many seniors thinks, they deserve respects from [이름]iors for only their work term or even age. But I never concede it. If we continue this misuse, we cannnot be advanced country.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Brian!
Your insights shed light on a significant cultural aspect that warrants attention. The hierarchical dynamics you mentioned, particularly in the workplace, appear to pose challenges to fostering equality and meritocracy.
Thanks for sharing this. ^^
~ Teacher Maxine
>> As I mentioned earlier regarding Korean honorifics, I advocate for the elimination of unjust social practices.
The most serious practice is relationship between senior and [이름]ior.
>> The most serious issue lies in the relationship between seniors and [이름]iors.
This relationships can be easily seen in work.
>> These relationships are commonly observed in the workplace.
Many seniors thinks, they deserve respects from [이름]iors for only their work term or even age. But I never concede it.
>> Many seniors think they deserve respect from [이름]iors based solely on their tenure or age. However, I do not agree with this perspective.
If we continue this misuse, we cannnot be advanced country.
>> If we persist in this misuse, we cannot become an advanced country.
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