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2025-02-17 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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It is the worst problem that there are too many universities in Korea. It was resulted owing to wrong and irresponsible university policies of government. I insist on abolishing unnecessary low-level universities. Like now, if we accept foreign students indiscriminately, the academic quality of university become lower rapidly. They have only interested in solving financial pressure.

강사 첨삭

Ms. [이름]!
How are you? 
You seemed busy these days. Anyway, I still appreciate that you spent some time writing your thoughts on our homework.
See you in class.
Aki~

It is the worst problem that there are too many universities in Korea.
>>> CORRECT!

It was resulted owing to wrong and irresponsible university policies of government.
>>> It has resulted owing to wrong and irresponsible university policies of the government.

I insist on abolishing unnecessary low-level universities.
>>> CORRECT!

Like now, if we accept foreign students indiscriminately, the academic quality of university become lower rapidly.
>>> Like now, if we accept foreign students indiscriminately, the academic quality of universities will decrease rapidly.

They have only interested in solving financial pressure.
>>>  They are only interested in solving financial pressure.
>>> They only have an interest in solving financial pressures.

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