Baseball 3

The baseball had been start last Friday.Unfortunately, KIA failed.But next day KIA won the NC.Yang heon jong hit 2 homerun and KIA's forienger pitcher didn't do well.In Saturday's game KIA's pitcher do well.LG made 2 ending hit and ranking is 1 and Hwanha's ranking is 10.Dusan and Samsung baseball game was exciting.Nexen Yun Seok Min hit ending hit.My friend got a baseball ball to the baseball player.Today my team have a match with LG. I don't said you are the greatest man.If you are good man and I am the greatest man in the world.

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The baseball had been start last Friday.

>> The baseball games started since Friday.

OR:

>> The baseball season started last Friday.

Unfortunately, KIA failed.

>> Correct.

BETTER:

>> Unfortunately, KIA lost a game in the kick-offs.

But next day KIA won the NC.

>> But during the next day, KIA won over the NC.

YOU MEAN TO SAY:

>> The KIA Tigers regained momentum the next day by winning over the NC Dinos.

Yang heon jong hit 2 homerun and KIA\'s forienger pitcher didn\'t do well.

>> KIA\'s Yang Hyeon Jong hit two homeruns while the foreigner pitcher did not do well.

OR:

>> During that game, KIA\'s Yang Hyeon Jong was remarkable for hitting two homeruns in contrast to the pitcher\'s performance.

In Saturday\'s game KIA\'s pitcher do well.

>> During the Saturday game, KIA\'s pitcher did well.

LG made 2 ending hit and ranking is 1 and Hwanha\'s ranking is 10.

>> LG Twins made two ending hits claiming the 1st place and Hanwha Eagles ranked 10th.

Dusan and Samsung baseball game was exciting.

>> Correct.

BETTER:

>> One of the most memorable games was between the Dusan Bears and Samsung Lions because it was exciting.

Nexen Yun Seok Min hit ending hit.

>> Nexen Yun Seok Min delivered the ending hit.

YOU MEAN TO SAY:

>> At the end of the games, Nexen Heroes\' Yun Seok Min delivered the ending hit.

My friend got a baseball ball to the baseball player.

>> My friend received a ball from a baseball player.

Today my team have a match with LG.

>> Today, my team will have a match with the LG Twins.

OR:

>> Today, my favorite team will be facing against the LG Twins.

I don\'t said you are the greatest man.

>> I will not acknowledge that you are the best.

If you are good man and I am the greatest man in the world.

>> If you are a good man then I will be the best.