Baseball News:Korea versus Japan

2018-08-30 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Today there was a baseball match with Japan on 2. That time I was at school. And when I back to home the game was the last inning. And Korea win Japan 5-1. Korea baseball team was blamed by participating who want to get a gold medal because of army.And the result of the 1st game was lose. Korea baseball team was composed of pro-league.And there are the best player in Korea. But Daeman most of the players are from college baseball player. And on 3rd game there was a game with Hongkong. The result was Korea win Hongkong 21-3 but Korea usually win Hongkong really easily. But that game its takes more than 3hours to win Hongkong. After that game Korea go to Super League. Daeman and Korea and China and Japan are having a match. And two teams go to final. But Korea lose Daeman in first league. So in super league Daeman win Korea with no game. And today Korea win Japan. If Korea win China and Daeman win Japan to really big point Korea can go to Final.

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Today there was a baseball match with Japan on 2.

>> Today there was a baseball match of Korea against Japan at 2.

That time I was at school.

>> Correct

And when I back to home the game was the last inning. And Korea win Japan 5-1.

>> When I went back home, the game was at the last inning. Then Korean won over Japan at 5-1.

Korea baseball team was blamed by participating who want to get a gold medal because of army.

>> Korea baseball team was blamed of participating to get a gold medal to avoid the military service.

And the result of the 1st game was lose.

>> The result of the first game was a lose.

Korea baseball team was composed of pro-league.And there are the best player in Korea.

>> Korea baseball team is composed of pro-league and they are the best players in Korea.

But Daeman most of the players are from college baseball player. And on 3rd game there was a game with Hongkong.

>> But with Daemen, most of the players are college baseball player and on the 3rd game,  there was a game with HongKong.

The result was Korea win Hongkong 21-3 but Korea usually win Hongkong really easily.

>> The result was Korean won with 21-3. Korea usually wins against HongKong easily.

But that game its takes more than 3hours to win Hongkong.

>> But at that game, it took more than three hours to win over HongKong.

After that game Korea go to Super League. Daeman and Korea and China and Japan are having a match.

>> After that game, Korea will go to the Super League. Daemen, Korea, China and Japan will have a match.

And two teams go to final. But Korea lose Daeman in first league. So in super league Daeman win Korea with no game.

>> The two team will then go to the finals. But Korea lost to Daemen in the first league. So in Super League, Daemen wins over Korea without a game.

And today Korea win Japan. If Korea win China and Daeman win Japan to really big point Korea can go to Final.

>> And today, Korea won over Japan. If Korea will win against China and Daemen wins over Japan with big points, Korean can go to the finals.

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