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2016-05-03 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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KIA Tigers some pitcher injured.Yun Seok Min,Sim Dong Seup,Han Seung Hyeok,Kim yun dong,Im [Name] hyeok.These days we did not do well.1win 4lose.Last week KIA's score.Hwanha is catcing KIA.When Hwanha win 3game in a row and KIA failed 3game in a row,KIA ranking will be the worst ranking.Dusan and Sk is good these days.Nc Dinosaur Eric did well for 15game.He hitted 3 homerun and score 15.My team have to do well.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]. ^^

How was your day today?

I hope everything\'s great. ^^

Anyways, thank you again for sharing such news about your team.

May your team win great matches so that they will not go down the ranks. ^^



Well, you are improving in completing the thought of your sentences.

You are doing good telling your stories in detail. ^^


Anyhow, I corrected your output.

Take note of the usual errors you commit like making incomplete sentences.

Also, take a closer look at words with wrong spellings.



See you on our next class. ^^

Take care always. ^^



Always,

Teacher Kris



KIA Tigers some pitcher injured.

>> Some of the KIA Tigers\' pitchers were injured.

Yun Seok Min,Sim Dong Seup,Han Seung Hyeok,Kim yun dong,Im [Name] hyeok.

>> They were Yun Suk Min, Shim Dong Seop, Han Seung Hyeok, Kim Yun Dong and Im [Name] Hyeok.

These days we did not do well.

>> Correct!

1win 4lose.

>> We had one win and four loses.

Last week KIA\'s score.

>> That was KIA\'s score last week.

Hwanha is catcing KIA.

>> Hwanwha is catching up with KIA.

When Hwanha win 3game in a row and KIA failed 3game in a row,KIA ranking will be the worst ranking.

>> If Hwanwha will win three games in a row and KIA fails three consecutive games, KIA\'s ranking will be the worst.

Dusan and Sk is good these days.

>> Dusan and SK are doing good these days.

Nc Dinosaur Eric did well for 15game.

>> NC Dino\'s Eric Thames did well for the 15th game.

OR:

>> NC Dino\'s Eric Hacker did well for the 15th game.

He hitted 3 homerun and score 15.

>> He hit three homeruns and scored fifteen points.

My team have to do well. 

>> My team has to do well.

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