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2016-06-24 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

학생이 쓴 원문

Yesterday,my team lose the game.I don't want to talk about yesterday game.It was a angy game.Lotte hitted almost 28hit.We lose the game 18-5.It's really terrible score. Today,we have a match with Lotte. KIA vs Lotte Yang hyeon jng vs Josh Lindblum LG and Sk had a fight and NC and Hwanha have a fight at the baseball sadium. Saden,Sk player break away from Sk.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],

Good afternoon,

I am sorry that you were a little bit uncomfortable with the topic.

KIA tigers did not do well in the game. Maybe there were some

problems in there team.

Anyway, they will redeem their rank soon.

Think positive.


See you.


~~ Teacher Kris


Yesterday,my team lose the game.

>> Yesterday, my team lose the game.

I don\'t want to talk about yesterday game.

>> I don\'t want talk about the game yesterday.

It was a angy game.Lotte hitted almost 28hit.

>> It made me angry. Lotte hits almost 28 hits.

We lose the game 18-5.It\'s really terrible score.

>> We lose the game by 18-5; what a terrible score.
 Today,we have a match with Lotte.

>> Correct
 KIA vs Lotte

>> Correct

 Yang hyeon jng vs Josh Lindblum

>> Correct

 LG and Sk had a fight and NC and Hwanha have a fight at the baseball sadium.

>> LG and SK had a fight; and NC and Hwanha had a fight at the baseball stadium.
 Saden,Sk player break away from Sk.

>> Saden, who is an SK player, broke away from SK. 

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