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2016-04-19 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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We have a game today and today's pitcher is Yun Seong hwan and spruill.Hwanha's record is the worst.KIA's ranking is still 9.Dusan's ranking 1.Today's KIA Tigers line up is different.NC and Samsung is ranking 7.This game is a little important game.The road is will be hard.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^

Good evening and happy Tuesday!

So, it\'s the seventh baseball composition and I\'m surely learning a lot!

Thank you for expressing your passion. ^^

Keep on writing about baseball and don\'t forget to have fun! ^^

May you have strikes of happy happenings tomorrow!


~~ Teacher Kris

 

We have a game today and today\'s pitcher is Yun Seong hwan and spruill.

>> We had a game today and today\'s pitcher was Yun Seong Hwan and Zeke Spruill.

Hwanha\'s record is the worst.

>> Hwanha\'s record was the worst.

KIA\'s ranking is still 9.

>> KIA was still in the 9th rank

OR:

>> KIA was still ranked in 9th.

Dusan\'s ranking 1.

>> Dusan was ranked 1st.

BETTER:

>> On the other hand, Dusan was ranked 1st.

Today\'s KIA Tigers line up is different.

>> Today, KIA Tigers\'s line up was different.

OR:

>> KIA Tigers\'s line up today was different

NC and Samsung is ranking 7.

>> NC and Samsung were both ranked 7th.

This game is a little important game.

>> Today\'s little game was important.

OR:

>> This game was an important game.

The road is will be hard.

>> This road will be difficult.

OR DID YOU MEAN TO SAY:

>> The road to success will be difficult.

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