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2018-10-08 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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When i was not marrried, i enjoyed participating in some social club. For example, social meeting,climbing mountain, riding a bycicle and so on Long time ago, we kept in touch with firends in the school. But after gradued every school, we meet friends in the society. Nowdays, i usaually look for friends in the gym or swimming pool. Until now, i didn't meet some friends but if i get used to excersice i want to meet new friedns in my region.

강사 첨삭

Hello BB. Thank you for sending this in once more. I think socializing is important. Having a lot of friends is also a good thing. That\'s actually one of my goals in life too these days, to socialize more often.

- T. Beth

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When i was not marrried, i enjoyed participating in some social club.
>>>> When I was not yet married, I enjoyed participating in some social clubs.     
For example, social meeting,climbing mountain, riding a bycicle and so on
>>>> CORRECT. (For example, social meeting, climbing mountain, riding a bycicle and so on.)     
Long time ago, we kept in touch with firends in the school.
>>>> Long time ago, we kept in touch with friends in school.     
But after gradued every school, we meet friends in the society.
>>>>  But after graduating from every school, we meet friends in the society.    
Nowdays, i usaually look for friends in the gym or swimming pool.
>>>> Nowadays, I usually look for friends in the gym or at the swimming pool.     
Until now, i didn\'t meet some friends but if i get used to excersice i want to meet new friedns in my region.
>>>>   I haven\'t made new friends until now but if I get used to exercising, I cant to meet new friends in my neighborhood.   
   

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