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Hello BB. Thank you for answering and sending this in. I agree with you. People need a hobby for those particular reasons you mentioned. People tend to be very busy with work these days. Having a hobby could help them relieve stress and live a balanced lifestyle.
- T. Beth
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It is important that people have their hobbies.
>>> CORRECT.
Even though it is very simple.
>>> CORRECT.
>>> OR: Even though they are very simple.
Someone have hobbies reading books, listening music, excercising, climbing mountians ...so on
>>> Some would have hobbies of reading books, listening to music, excercising, climbing mountians and so on.
I think, Having hobbies is like taking a rest.
>>> CORRECT.
When we take a rest , we can recharge our energy.
>>> CORRECT.
My husband and i met at social climbing club.
>>> My husband and I met at a social climbing club.
When we go mountain , we talk about many things for climbing.
>>> When we go to the mountain, we talk about many things while climbing.
Hobby is not special, just people feel so good.
>>> The hobby itself is not that special, but the people with you make you feel good.
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