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2018-09-04 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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 The organization itself is not that special. Just in my office,in my family, i am a member of an organization. It is necessary that people have collaboration when people do something in an organization. And people have to have manner. Sometimes organization gives to me exciting but from time to time it gives to me disappointment because of rudness of others. .

강사 첨삭

Hello BB. Thank you for sending this in. I appreciate the effort. I would agree with you on this one. Sometimes, the only reason we enjoy being in a group is because of the people in it. Having a good relationship with them makes being in the group fun.

- T. Beth

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The organization itself is not that special.
>>>> CORRECT.
Just in my office,in my family, i am a member of an organization.
>>>> Just in my office and in my family, I am a member of these groups.
It is necessary that people have collaboration when people do something in an organization.
>>>> CORRECT.

>>>> OR: It is necessary for people to collaborate when they do something together in an organization.
And people have to have manner.
>>>> CORRECT.

>>>> OR: In addition, people have to be polite.

>>>> OR: In addition, people need to have manners.
Sometimes organization gives to me exciting but from time to time it gives to me disappointment because of rudness of others.

>>>>Sometimes, being in an organization gives me excitement but from time to time I get disappointed with others being rude.

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