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2018-09-13 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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When i was not married, i often went shopping near my house. i lived Kang Nam in Seoul where is very famous for new fashion. But after i moved this coutry, i annoyed going shooping. So i go shopping when the seasons change. i usually go shopping to buy my clothes. As i said, there is a shopping town in Kang Nam. The place of clothes's price is very cheap. Exception go shopping to buy my clothes, i usally enjoy doing web surfing . of course not as much as my husband

강사 첨삭

Hello BB. Thank you for this. Korean fashion is really trendy these days, especially in Southeast Asian countries. I think a person can be fashionable and not spend too much. Knowing where to do your shopping is important.

- T. Beth

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When i was not married, i often went shopping near my house.
>>>>
   CORRECT. (When I was not married, I often went shopping near my house.)   
i lived Kang Nam in Seoul where is very famous for new fashion.
>>>>
  I lived in Kang Nam in Seoul which is very famous for new fashion.
But after i moved this coutry, i annoyed going shooping.
>>>>
  But after I moved to this country side, I am annoyed going shopping.    
So i go shopping when the seasons change.
>>>>  CORRECT.

>>>> OR: So I only go shopping when the season changes.    
i usually go shopping to buy my clothes.
>>>> CORRECT.

>>>> OR: I usually go shopping to buy clothes for myself.     
As i said, there is a shopping town in Kang Nam.

>>>> Like I said, there is a shopping ton in Kang Nam.     
The place of clothes\'s price is very cheap.
>>>> The prices of clothes there are very cheap.     

Exception go shopping to buy my clothes, i usally enjoy doing web surfing .

>>>> Aside from shopping for my clothes, I usually enjoy wed surfing.     

of course not as much as my husband

>>>>  Not as much as my husband though.    


 

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