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2018-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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It is imortant to excercise in my life. I have worked out for a long time. Eventhough I don't work out very well, I try to keep up excercising. The reason why I work out that first, I'm interested my look. Second ,there is a lot of time in the morning. Third ,when I work out, I can imagine that I won't be old easily. I have heard some old woman talked with her friend in the gym. "When anyone were young , if they worked out they aren't old easily" I believe that too.

강사 첨삭

Hello BB. Thank you once again for this one. Good lesson. I agree. Working out makes you feel young and this would reflect on your appearance.   \"Young mind, young body\" so they say.

- T. Beth

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It is imortant to excercise in my life.
>>>>>  It is important to exercise in my life.
I have worked out for a long time.
>>>>> CORRECT.

Eventhough I don\'t work out very well, I try to keep up excercising.
>>>>> Even though I don\'t work out too often, I try to continue exercising.  
The reason why I work out that first, I\'m interested my look.
>>>>> The first reason I work out is I\'m conscious about my looks.   

Second, there is a lot of time in the morning.
>>>>> CORRECT.

>>>>> OR: Second, I have a lot of free time in the morning.  

Third ,when I work out, I can imagine that I won\'t be old easily.
>>>>> Third, when I work out, I can imagine that I won\'t get old easily. 
I have heard some old woman talked with her friend in the gym. 

>>>>> I heard an old woman talking with her friend in the gym.  

\"When anyone were young , if they worked out they aren\'t old easily\"
>>>>> \"Anyone who worked out when they were young wouldn\'t get old easily.\"
I believe that too.

>>>>> CORRECT. 


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