Beauty in my life

2020-02-14 · 첨삭 강사 Melody

학생이 쓴 원문

Actually, I\'m a little bit confused what your question is, but I am going to talk about an appearance. I\'ve read an article about the first impression before. According to the article, the first impression is the most important when we first meet someone. And his/her image will be classified in 4 seconds. I agree with this research because when we try to get to know each other, we don\'t have any information about him/her. The only thing we can get is the appearance and this is also a reason why we dress up when we go somewhere special such as interview. In Korea there are several typical processes of getting a job and one of them is interview. When we practice interviewing, mentors always say strongly about a smile and a pose. I am also practicing these things in thesedays to give a good impression to interviewers.

강사 첨삭

1. Actually, I\'m a little bit confused what your question is, but I am going to talk about an appearance.
>>Actually, I\'m a little bit confused of what your question really means, but I am going to talk about appearance.

2. I\'ve read an article about the first impression before.
>>I\'ve read an article about first impression before.

3. According to the article, the first impression is the most important when we first meet someone.
>> According to the article, first impression is the most important thing when we first meet someone.

4. And his/her image will be classified in 4 seconds.
>>CORRECT
OR>>And his/her image will be designated in 4 seconds.

5. I agree with this research because when we try to get to know each other, we don\'t have any information about him/her.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I agree with this research because when we first meet someone, we don\'t know anything about him/her.

6. The only thing we can get is the appearance and this is also a reason why we dress up when we go somewhere special such as interview.
>>CORRECT
OR>>The only thing we easily notice is the appearance and this is also the reason why we groom ourselves when we go somewhere special such as interview.

7. In Korea there are several typical processes of getting a job and one of them is interview.
>>CORRECT
OR>>In Korea there are several common processes of getting a job and one of them is interview.

8. When we practice interviewing, mentors always say strongly about a smile and a pose.
>>When we practice on our answers for an interview, mentors always strongly suggest to smile and be composed.

9. I am also practicing these things in thesedays to give a good impression to interviewers.
>>I am also practicing these things these days to give a good impression to interviewers.

Actually, you understood the question.

How you prepare for the interview is also good.

But perhaps, you could\'ve mentioned on how you maintain or take care of your looks or if you really care about it at the first place like in the case of many women or maybe some men.Overall, it\'s great!

-T.Melody^^

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