Beckman Laser Institute

2018-05-15 · 첨삭 강사 Amanda

학생이 쓴 원문

Hello, Dr. [Name] I am [이름] from the Catholic University of Korea in Korea. I am an assistant professor of department of dermatology. I got your e-mail address from Dr. [Name]. I am supposed to go on a short term visiting scholarship to UCI from upcoming June to August this year. My supervisor is Dr. [Name] in Cell Biology and Development at UC Irvine. My interest is mostly anti-aging,wound healing, atopic dermatitis and hair disorders. I am well informed of Beckman Laser Institute's reputation. I am writing to ask you whether I can have a chance to visit your department and look around your hospital system forjust 2-3 days during my stay. I have a short term J1 VISA now, and please let me know if you have some requirements. I am looking forward to listening from you soon. Thank you in advance.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] [이름]! Please check the revised version of your email below. Should you have any questions, please ask me during class. Thank you. ^-^ Amanda

REVISED:

Hello, Dr. [Name]

I am [이름] from the Catholic University of Korea in South Korea. I am an assistant professor in the Department of Dermatology.

I got your e-mail address from Dr. [Name]. I am scheduled to go on a short term visiting scholarship to UCI this coming June until August this year. My supervisor is Dr. [Name] in Cell Biology and Development at UC Irvine. My interest is mostly anti-aging, wound healing, atopic dermatitis and hair disorders. I am well informed of Beckman Laser Institute\'s outstanding reputation. I am writing to ask you if I can possibly have a chance to visit your department and look around your hospital system for 2 to 3 days during my stay. I have a short term J1 VISA now. Please let me know if you have some requirements.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Thank you in advance.

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