Becoming healthier

2020-03-09 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

학생이 쓴 원문

The best way to become healthier is exercising. Exercising everyday is important to the body. I didn\'t exercise for a while, but I climed the mountain yesterday. I felt healty and excited. Exercising is the best way to become healthier. I think also eating regularly is important too. We can\'t be healty when we starve. Eating essential nutrients is critical to the body. I think sleeping enoughly is important too. If we don\'t sleep, exercise harms to our body. Therefore sleeping, eating, exercising is both important to become healtier.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

Good afternoon!
Thank you for submitting your homework.
I appreciate your answers and I totally agree with them.
Having the right balance in all three things you mentioned is very important.
So, stay healthy and always take care of yourself. ^^

~Teacher Gina

The best way to become healthier is exercising.
>> CORRECT.
Exercising everyday is important to the body. 
>> CORRECT.
I didn\'t exercise for a while, but I climed the mountain yesterday. 
>> I didn\'t exercise for a while, but I climbed the mountain yesterday.
I felt healty and excited.
>> I felt healthy and excited.
 Exercising is the best way to become healthier. 
>> CORRECT.
I think also eating regularly is important too. 
>> I think eating regularly is important too.
>> Or: I think eating regularly is important also.
We can\'t be healty when we starve.
>> We can\'t be healthy when we starve.
 Eating essential nutrients is critical to the body. 
>> CORRECT.
I think sleeping enoughly is important too.
>> I think having enough sleep is important too.
 If we don\'t sleep, exercise harms to our body. 
>> If we don\'t sleep, exercising harms our body.
Therefore sleeping, eating, exercising is both important to become healtier.
>> Therefore, sleeping, eating and exercising are important to become healthier.

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