beeper?
학생이 쓴 원문
Maybe nobody will want to use of beeper if they have ever used smartphone even one time.
Digital medias have absolute power incomparable to others.
So anyone is addicted easily if they don\'t try to control the desire for themselves.
Big tech companies made people especially teenagers fall into addiction quickly.
Algorithm dominate people\'s life including value and relationship even.
강사 첨삭
Good morning, Ms. [이름]!
That is true. It would be hard for the students to live a life without a phone, but if this would bring them to focus on their studies and not be addicted to online games and services, it should be banned. I am a parent, and I am hoping the authority will exercise its power to implement this.
Aki~
Maybe nobody will want to use of beeper if they have ever used smartphone even one time.
>>> Maybe nobody will want to use a beeper if they have ever used a smartphone even one time.
Digital medias have absolute power incomparable to others.
>>> Digital media have absolute power incomparable to others.
So anyone is addicted easily if they don\'t try to control the desire for themselves.
>>> So, anyone can easily become addicted if they don\'t try to control their desire for themselves.
Big tech companies made people especially teenagers fall into addiction quickly.
>>> Big tech companies made people, especially teenagers, fall into addiction quickly.
Algorithm dominate people\'s life including value and relationship even.
>>> Algorithm dominates people\'s life, including value and relationships.
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