Before you kick the bucket, what are the things you want to experience? Give me at least five and ex
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I\\\'m not sure but I have things that I am and will want to do even if I\\\'m grown up.
First, I want to have a pet. Because I never had a pet in my whole life. Except I had fish but they died early. I want to have a pet that I can touch and play with like dogs or cats. And I don\\\'t have any siblings so sometimes I\\\'m so bored.
Second, I want to work at a pet cafe because I can see them and pet them and also earn money. But I will need other jobs if I want to earn lots of money.
Third, I want to learn how to draw professionally by a teacher. I won\\\'t have a job that needs to draw ( I think ) but I like them.
Forth, I want to have a good phone. My phone is soo old it even die even if it has a full battery. And in the future, I think even if I buy new model of that phone, I will want a new one if it comes out.
And for last, I want to read all Harry Potter books and see Harry Potter movies in English. And that means I want to be good at English too. So I will study English harder and harder. :-)
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Hello [이름],
Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you.
Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)
Before you kick the bucket, what are the things you want to experience?
Give me at least five and explain.
I\\\'m not sure but I have things that I am and will want to do even if I\\\'m grown up.
>>> I\'m not sure but I have these things that I want to do even if I\'m already grown up.
First, I want to have a pet. Because I never had a pet in my whole life.
>>> First, I want to have a pet because I never had a pet in my whole life.
Except I had fish but they died early.
>>> Except for a fish that I had before but they died early.
I want to have a pet that I can touch and play with like dogs or cats.
>>> I want to have a pet that I can touch and play with like dogs or cats.
And I don\\\'t have any siblings so sometimes I\\\'m so bored.
>>> Also, I don\'t have any siblings so sometimes I\'m so bored.
Second, I want to work at a pet cafe because I can see them and pet them and also earn money.
>>> Second, I want to work at a pet cafe because I can see them, pet them and also earn money.
But I will need other jobs if I want to earn lots of money.
>>> But I will need other jobs if I want to earn lots of money.
Third, I want to learn how to draw professionally by a teacher.
>>> Third, I want to learn how to draw professionally from a professional teacher.
I won\\\'t have a job that needs to draw ( I think ) but I like them.
>>> I won\'t have a job that needs to draw ( I think ) but I like them.
Forth, I want to have a good phone. My phone is soo old it even die even if it has a full battery.
>>> Forth, I want to have a good phone. My phone is so old that it even dies even if it has a full battery.
And in the future, I think even if I buy new model of that phone, I will want a new one if it comes out.
>>> In the future, I think even if I buy a new model of that phone, still I want a new one if it comes out.
And for last, I want to read all Harry Potter books and see Harry Potter movies in English. And that means I want to be good at English too.
>>> And for the last, I want to read all the Harry Potter novels and see all its movies in English. And that means that I need to be good at English too.
So I will study English harder and harder.
>>> So I will study English harder every day.
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