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2025-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

학생이 쓴 원문

It is sad that someone lives through begging in the same country. Advanced countries try to make good welfare system for people like compulsory education, subsidy and pension and so on. But I think it is impossible any government could not solve perfectly this problem. Even it is not the best way to give subsidy for the poor people . We need to teach working skill and to encourage for motivation for working.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름]!
\"Give a man a fish, and you feed him for a day. Teach a man to fish, and you feed him for a lifetime.\"
This proverb emphasizes the idea that it\'s better to teach someone how to be self-sufficient and resourceful rather than just providing short-term help. By teaching a skill, you empower that person to provide for themselves in the future, rather than constantly relying on others for support. It highlights the value of education, independence, and long-term solutions over temporary fixes.
Aki~


It is sad that someone lives through begging in the same country.
>>> Sadly, someone lives through begging in the same country.

Advanced countries try to make good welfare system for people like compulsory education, subsidy and pension and so on.
>>> Advanced countries try to make good welfare systems for people like compulsory education, subsidies, pensions, and so on.

But I think it is impossible any government could not solve perfectly this problem.
>>> But I think no government can solve his problem perfectly.
 
Even it is not the best way to give subsidy for the poor people .
>>>  Even it is not the best way to give subsidies to poor people.

We need to teach working skill and to encourage for motivation for working.
>>> We need to teach and encourage them to work.

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