\"Being a woman is a terribly difficult task, since it consists principally in dealing with men.\" W
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I definitely agree with the fact that women have been living in a harsh society. They\'re still claiming that there are lots of inequality especially in their workplaces. In addition, most married women are forced to look after their children by themselves.
In past, females only had the role of a house wife in many countries. Fortunately the equality of gender has generally been recognized since 20th century, they\'ve had a chance to get a job in varied working areas. However, since then, they have to compete with men in their companies. Moreover, employed women realized that everything outside world had actually been constructed for men. Every furniture in their offices fitted for a male\'s body type, there was no resting room for women and their opinions were easily being ignored with no reason.
Therefore, being a woman is a terribly difficult task. They have to fight with an improper sexual treatment, have to deal with tons of housework and have to compete with men not to be ignored.
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I definitely agree with the fact that women have been living in a harsh society.
>> or: I couldn\'t agree more with the fact that women have been living in a harsh society.
They\'re still claiming that there are lots of inequality especially in their workplaces.
>> There are claims that different forms of inequality abound especially in workplaces.
In addition, most married women are forced to look after their children by themselves.
>> or: Furthermore, it is widely believed that women\'s main duty is to take care of the family.
In past, females only had the role of a house wife in many countries.
>> In many countries back in the day, women were seen as just plain housewives.
Fortunately the equality of gender has generally been recognized since 20th century, they\'ve had a chance to get a job in varied working areas.
>> Fortunately, gender equality has been generally recognized since the 20th century and women have had the chance to get varied jobs, especially outside the home.
However, since then, they have to compete with men in their companies.
>> or: Gender equality notwithstanding, most workplaces are still male-dominated, which sets up women to compete.
Moreover, employed women realized that everything outside world had actually been constructed for men.
>> As mentioned above, once women enter the working world, they have to face the fact that they live in a male-dominated or patriarchal society.
Every furniture in their offices fitted for a male\'s body type, there was no resting room for women and their opinions were easily being ignored with no reason.
>> Every furniture in their offices are designed to fit a male\'s body type, there are no restrooms for women in some workplaces, and their opinions are easily ignored for no reason.
Therefore, being a woman is a terribly difficult task.
>> Therefore, being a women is terribly challenging.
They have to fight with an improper sexual treatment, have to deal with tons of housework and have to compete with men not to be ignored.
>> They have to fight against sexual harassment, deal with tons of housework, and compete with men so as not to be ignored or taken for granted.
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