Being e-enabled?
학생이 쓴 원문
1. Do you want that everything that we will do is through online? Why or why not?
- I don\'t want that because people today seem to be losing their human qualities. Nowadays as all services are e-enabled, many facts can be manipulated and distored easily. For example, Recently voter identifiers is clearly also linked to elections. It is becoming fully electronic or e-enabled. In Korea, the communist party exploited this system and they manipulated National Assembly Election in April. And many misinterpretaions can happen between peple.
Along with being e-enabled, many processes were mechanized. Many factories now employ sophisticated machinery that automates many kinds of processes. As a result, many people should lose their jobs.
2. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online transactions?
The advantage are that : 1. It is convient. 2. It is fast. 3. We can do it anywhere.
The disadvatge is that : The mistakes can be occurred,when the person insert wrong numbers.
강사 첨삭
Thank you Ms. [Name]!
~Lucy
I don\'t want that because people today seem to be losing their human qualities.
>>CORRECT!
Nowadays as all services are e-enabled, many facts can be manipulated and distored easily.
>>CORRECT!
For example, Recently voter identifiers is clearly also linked to elections.
>>For example, recently voter identifiers is clearly also linked to elections.
It is becoming fully electronic or e-enabled.
>>CORRECT!
In Korea, the communist party exploited this system and they manipulated National Assembly Election in April.
>>CORRECT!
And many misinterpretaions can happen between peple.
>>And many misinterpretations can happen between people.
Along with being e-enabled, many processes were mechanized.
>>CORRECT!
Many factories now employ sophisticated machinery that automates many kinds of processes.
>>CORRECT!
As a result, many people should lose their jobs.
>>CORRECT!
The advantage are that : 1. It is convient. 2. It is fast. 3. We can do it anywhere.
The advantage are that : 1. It is convient. 2. It is fast. 3. We can do it anywhere.
>>The advantages are that : 1. It is convient. 2. It is fast. 3. We can do it anywhere.
The disadvatge is that : The mistakes can be occurred,when the person insert wrong numbers.
The disadvatge is that : The mistakes can be occurred,when the person insert wrong numbers.
>>CORRECT!
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