Believe God or not.
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t believe in God.
My parents believed in Buddhism, but I believe in myself.
No matter how much they are a parent,they can\'t force it.
There seem to be many people who are not religious in Korea.
Most of them are busy working for themselves and their families.
There seem to be a lot of realistic parts.
But i can understand those who believe in God.
They can find stability by finding God and praying for someone in mentally weak or difficult times.
Everyone should respect what they see and what others choose.
강사 첨삭
Hi Evan:)
Your last sentence is correct. Everyone is entitled to their own beliefs.
Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.
-Teacher EliseI don\'t believe in God.
>> CORRECT
My parents believed in Buddhism, but I believe in myself.
>> My parents believe in Buddhism, but I don\'t.
No matter how much they are a parent,they can\'t force it.
>> Even if they are my parents, they still can\'t force me to believe in it.
There seem to be many people who are not religious in Korea.
>> There seem to be many people who are not religious here in South Korea.
Most of them are busy working for themselves and their families.
>> CORRECT
There seem to be a lot of realistic parts.
>> CORRECT
But i can understand those who believe in God.
>> But I can understand those who believe in God.
They can find stability by finding God and praying for someone in mentally weak or difficult times.
>> They can find stability by finding God and praying for someone mentally through weak or difficult times.
Everyone should respect what they see and what others choose.
>> CORRECT
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