benefits of eaing home made meals

2013-03-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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It's no doubt that eating out is convenient and tasty. However, eating out regularly threat the health and domestic ecomony. eating out costs much more thatn eating at home. The price of the food in restaurants includes wage for employees. you pay for the ingredients and the labor of employees. Most food from restaurants and precooked meals contain high sodium , fat as well as they are cooked with unhealthy processed ingredients.In contract, homemade meals are made of fresh and natural ingredients. Furthermore, you can take balanced nutrition you need. Food portion is more than you need to eat in restaurants while you prepare exactly asmuch as you need. Cooking at home might be little annoyed and not tasty enough but it's the best way to keep you health and save money.

강사 첨삭

Hi there! 

This is a very nice composition that you made.^^  You had expressed yourself well.  I agree that eating at home and cooking your own food is better than eating out.  Your ideas are brilliant.  I hope you can share more ideas in class.  I love listening to them.

See you,

T. Jeny^^

It\'s no doubt that eating out is conv!nient and tasty.

>> There is no doubt that eating out is more convenient and the foods are tasty.

However, eating out regularly threat the health and domestic ecomony.

>> However, eating out regularly is a treat to your health and domestic economy.

eating out costs much more thatn eating at home.

>> Eating out costs much more compared to eating at home.

The price of the food in restaurants includes wage for employees.

>> The prices of the food in restaurants include wages for employees.

you pay for the ingredients and the labor of employees.

>> You also pay for the ingredients and the labor of employees.

Most food from restaurants and precooked meals contain high sodium ,

>> Most foods from restaurants are precooked meals that contain high sodium.

fat as well as they are cooked with unhealthy processed ingredients.

>> They are high in fat and cooked with unhealthy processed ingredients.

In contract, homemade meals are made of fresh and natural ingredients.

>> In contrast, homemade meals are made of fresh and natural ingredients.

Furthermore, you can take balanced nutrition you need.

>> Furthermore, you can have  a balanced nutrition that your body needs.

Food portion is more than you need to eat in restaurants while you prepare exactly asmuch as you need.
>> The portion of food served in a restaurant is usually more than what you can eat. You can prepare food at home with just the right amount you need.

Cooking at home might be little annoyed and not tasty enough but it\'s the best way to keep you health and save money.

>>  Cooking at home might be a little annoying and not tasty enough.  But, its the best way to maintain good health and save money.

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