Best Invention
학생이 쓴 원문
Theme: [ESSAY] What do you think is the best invention of all time?
I think it\'s the filament one that Edison invented.
Because when there\'s no filament, we can\'t see anything when it\'s dark.
And our house can catch fire easiely.
So, I think it\'s a filament!
강사 첨삭
Here\'s another edited composition for you. Again, please take note of the misspelled word. Also, I believe I reminded you a few times that it\'s better not to start your sentence with the word \"because\"; you may do this in speaking form but not in written form because the latter one is standard or formal English.
Catch you on Wednesday, [이름]!
Cheers,
Jean~~
Theme: [ESSAY] What do you think is the best invention of all time?
I think it\'s the filament one that Edison invented. Because when there\'s no filament, we can\'t see anything when it\'s dark.
>> If you ask me, it\'s definitely the filament that Edison invented because without it, we won\'t be able to see anything when it\'s dark.
And our house can catch fire easiely.
>> And our house can catch fire easily. (Note the spelling of \"easily\".)
>> OR: And fire accidents would happen more frequently.
So, I think it\'s a filament!
>> So, I think it\'s the filament!
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