Best occupation

2010-08-19 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

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I think that the best occupation is unusual expert like doctor, lawyer and professor. Everyone is expert of own area but some area like cleaner has too many people. They also expert, but this job is usual and subordinate. For example, unusual expert is scientist of environment not cleaner. They have social position, honor and wealth and they are respected people. However best occupation depends on own values. Actually I think that to make me happy and satisfaction is the real best occupation. To me, novelist and therapist are best. Yesterday we couldn't finish question 4,5. So my answer writes here. 4. Although I confused, someday I'll tell him. 5. If look at the big picture, friendship and love are same. However think about specific things, friendship is different from love delicately.

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Hi [이름], Thank you for sharing your own view about the best jobs. I included the corrections here below. I’m glad that you’ve included your answers for the unanswered questions last night. See you tonight, Connie I think that the best occupation is unusual expert like doctor, lawyer and professor. >> I think the best occupations are with unusual expertise like doctor, lawyer and professor. Everyone is expert of own area but some area like cleaner has too many people. >> Everyone has their own specializations except for cleaners which is very common They also expert, but this job is usual and subordinate. >> They are also experts but these jobs are usually subordinate. For example, unusual expert is scientist of environment not cleaner. >> An example of unusual job is a scientist. They have social position, honor and wealth and they are respected people. >> They have a social position, honor, and wealth so they are respected by people. However best occupation depends on own values. >> However, the best occupation depends on own values. Actually I think that to make me happy and satisfaction is the real best occupation. >> I’ll be happy and satisfied if I will the best occupation. To me, novelist and therapist are best. >> Novelist and therapist are the best. Yesterday we couldn't finish question 4,5. >> Yesterday we weren’t able to finish questions nos 4 and 5. So my answer writes here. >> So I wrote my answers. 4. Although I confused, someday I'll tell him. >> Although I’m confused, I have to tell him someday. - better5. If look at the big picture, friendship and love are same. >> In a wider view, friendship and love are the same.  However think about specific things, friendship is different from love delicately. >> However, specifically friendship is different from love.

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