Best things of living in Korea

2021-03-03 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

학생이 쓴 원문

These days, more and more people prefer to live in Korea, especially Seoul. There are various benefits living in South Korea. This essay will describe representative advantages living in Korea. First, technology has been incredibly developed in Korea compared to the past. This development leads to well-organized transportation infrastructure. Therefore, people can easily move to different areas. Moreover, public transportation such as subway and taxes are clean which make citizens much more comfortable to enjoy. Second, the Internet is so fast in Korea. For example, everyone can use free wifi in every building also in subway. They can search on the Internet whenever they want. In conclusion, there are several benefits of living in Korea. I recommend foreign people to live in Korea.

강사 첨삭

Hi Emily! That sounds good! Living there really is a bliss. I wish I would get the chance to go there soon and experience it myself. :)

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-Teacher Elise

These days, more and more people prefer to live in Korea, especially Seoul.
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There are various benefits living in South Korea.
>> CORRECT

This essay will describe representative advantages living in Korea.
>> This essay would represent advantages of living in Korea.

First, technology has been incredibly developed in Korea compared to the past.
>>CORRECT

This development leads to well-organized transportation infrastructure.
>>This development leads to well-organized transportation infrastructures.

Therefore, people can easily move to different areas.
>>CORRECT

Moreover, public transportation such as subway and taxes are clean which make citizens much more comfortable to enjoy.
>> Moreover, public transportation such as subways and taxis are clean which make citizens much more comfortable.

Second, the Internet is so fast in Korea.
>>CORRECT

For example, everyone can use free wifi in every building also in subway.
>>For example, everyone can use free Wi-Fi in every building also in subway.

They can search on the Internet whenever they want.
>>CORRECT

In conclusion, there are several benefits of living in Korea.
>>In conclusion, there are several benefits in living in Korea.

I recommend foreign people to live in Korea.
>>CORRECT

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