bicycles
학생이 쓴 원문
Our school has a big campus so almost all of students have a bicycle to conveniently move around. However we should have strict rules when pedestrians and bicyclers are passing by street together. It is so dangerous when the bicycler are going to pass the walker with high speed. We have a bicycle-only road but it is not strictly followed. so to keep accident not happened, we stick to the rules that are the easiest way to keep your life.
강사 첨삭
Hi John!
Your sentences are better structured this time.
I really admire that.
I hope you continue improving.
Keep working hard.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Our school has a big campus so almost all of students have a bicycle to conveniently move around.
>> Our school has a big campus so almost all of the students have a bicycle to conveniently move around.
However we should have strict rules when pedestrians and bicyclers are passing by street together.
>> However we should have strict rules when pedestrians and cyclists are passing the street at the same time.
It is so dangerous when the bicycler are going to pass the walker with high speed.
>> It is so dangerous when a cyclist passes a pedestrian with high speed.
We have a bicycle-only road but it is not strictly followed.
>> We have \"bicycle-only\" roads but they are not strictly followed.
so to keep accident not happened, we stick to the rules that are the easiest way to keep your life.
>> So to keep accidents from happening, we must stick to the rules because this is the best way to protect yourself.
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