BIG

2017-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Writing task! What is your all-time favorite English movie? BIG is my all-time favorite English movie, starring Tom Hanks. Thirteen-years-old boy, Josh fulfills his wish that he wants to be a thirty-years-old grown-up by Magician Zolta machine. His family regards grown-up Josh as a crazy man and kicks him out. To make a living, Josh enters a toy company thanks to fake resume. The big boy shows his ability in a innocent view of a kid in the company and meets a beautiful woman who likes Josh's ability and innocence. They fall in love and make love. However, the time Josh has to decide whether he stays with his loving girlfriend or he goes back to his family visits him. The end? I will not let you know. I don't want to be a spoiler. ^.^; In this movie, I had chances to think over the real meaning of a grown-up. I sometimes ask myself that I am a grown-up. The answer is not yet. I'm still a growing. To tell the truth, I want to be a growing to the last breath of my life.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, [이름]!

I\'ve heard about this film but I haven\'t seen it yet!

Your little synopsis here makes me want to watch it!

I\'m definitely watching it this weekend.

It actually sounds like a Korean drama (with the same title) that I\'ve seen before.

Thanks for doing your homework.

Ciao!

~Teacher Marie~ ^^

BIG is my all-time favorite English movie, starring Tom Hanks.
>> CORRECT!

OR:
>> The movie, \"Big\", starring Tom Hanks, is my all-time favorite English movie.
 Thirteen-years-old boy, Josh fulfills his wish that he wants to be a thirty-years-old grown-up by Magician Zolta machine.

>> Thirteen-year-old boy, Josh, fulfills his wish to become a thirty-year-old adult, through the help of the Magician Zolta Machine.

His family regards grown-up Josh as a crazy man and kicks him out.

>> His family thought grown-up Josh is a crazy man and kicks him out.

To make a living, Josh enters a toy company thanks to fake resume.

>> To make a living, Josh enters a toy company, thanks to a fake resume.

The big boy shows his ability in a innocent view of a kid in the company and meets a beautiful woman who likes Josh\'s ability and innocence.

>> He shows his ability in understanding the innocence of kids and then meets a beautiful woman who likes his ability and innocence.

They fall in love and make love.

>> CORRECT!

However, the time Josh has to decide whether he stays with his loving girlfriend or he goes back to his family visits him. 

>> However, the time comes when Josh has to decide whether he should stay with his loving girlfriend or go back to his family.

 The end?

>> CORRECT!

I will not let you know.

>> CORRECT!

I don\'t want to be a spoiler. ^.^;
>> CORRECT!
In this movie, I had chances to think over the real meaning of a grown-up.

>> In this movie, I had a chance to think about the real meaning of being a grown-up.

I sometimes ask myself that I am a grown-up.

>> I sometimes ask myself if I am really a grown-up.

The answer is not yet.

>> CORRECT!

 I\'m still a growing.

>> I\'m still growing.

To tell the truth, I want to be a growing to the last breath of my life.

>> To tell you the truth, I want to continue growing until I take my last breath.


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