Bird Flu

2016-12-20 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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There is a Bird Flu in Korea.It makes the egg's price high and there is no egg in market because Bird Flu.Bird Flu is a bird's disease.And that time we rarely eat chicken.But eating chicken is not matter.We should don't go to the chicken.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!


This is shocking!

There\'s another issue about health again in your country.

I remember the MERS outbreak last year.

Well, just take care of yourself and you\'re right, don\'t go for chicken nowadays because it\'s dangerous.

Take care!


_Teacher Dianne ^^

 

There is a Bird Flu in Korea.

>> There\'s a Bird Flu outbreak in Korea now.

It makes the egg\'s price high and there is no egg in market because Bird Flu.

>> It makes the price of the eggs higher or more expensive in the market.

>> Or: Because of Bird Flu the price of the eggs higher or more expensive in the market.

Bird Flu is a bird\'s disease.And that time we rarely eat chicken.

>> Bird Flu is a kind of a bird\'s disease and this time we rarely eat chicken.

But eating chicken is not matter.We should don\'t go to the chicken.

>> But eating chicken doesn\'t matter so we should not buy or eat chicken.

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