Birth day is my special day.
학생이 쓴 원문
My special day is my birth day. My birth day is like anniversary about me. At that time, I had been always happy because there were people that celebrated my birth. It means they love me. I can depend on people who love me. Then, I feel comfortable just people who love me are exist. However, if the people who celebrate my birth day are not exist, it means there are no people who love me, so I will be very sad. Therefore, I always have to thank for God just that people are exist.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Daniel! Your homework is
well-organized and easy to understand. Good job! However, remember
to use pronouns to replace nouns in your sentences.
I am glad that you appreciate the people who love you and that you are thankful for them.
- Teacher Debbie
>> My special day is my birthday.
My birth day is like anniversary about me.
>> It is like my anniversary.
At that time, I had been always happy because there were people that celebrated my birth.
>> During that time, I am always happy because there are people who celebrate it with me.
It means they love me.
>> This is a good sentence.
I can depend on people who love me.
>> This is a good sentence.
Then, I feel comfortable just people who love me are exist.
>> I am thankful that they exist.
However, if the people who celebrate my birth day are not exist, it means there are no people who love me, so I will be very sad.
>> If they didn\'t, nobody could love me, and I would be very sad.
Therefore, I always have to thank for God just that people are exist.
>> Therefore, I always have to thank God for them.
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