birth rate
학생이 쓴 원문
Most of government measures are payment of allowance and subsidies.
Even these policies proved as not good effective .
Many couples want to enjoy life and live comfortably without children..
We call them the no KIDS tribes.
The government give longer maternity leave including husband.
강사 첨삭
Ms. [이름]!
We understand the intention of the government and why they keep providing these new kinds of policies, however, they cannot guarantee that every citizen of Korea is in favor of this. They must find the real reason for women who do not want to give birth.
Have a good day!
Aki~
Most of government measures are payment of allowance and subsidies.
>>> Most government measures are payment of allowances and subsidies.
Even these policies proved as not good effective.
>>> Even these policies proved to be not effective.
Many couples want to enjoy life and live comfortably without children.
>>> CORRECT!
We call them the no KIDS tribes.
>>> CORRECT!
The government give longer maternity leave including husband.
>>> The government gives longer maternity leave including the husband.
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