birthrate
학생이 쓴 원문
It is difficult to feel birthrate rises in reality because I am rare to see prenants women around me.
Government and many municipalities tro ti support childbirth policies activiely with system and money.
One is interesting that the upper class has many children and get marry early than the middle class.
Many young generation don\'t feel family\'s happiness or they regard more important value to enjoy their own pleasure.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ms. [이름]!
Taking positive measures to increase birth rates in some countries can be challenging. Some may or may not participate in the government\'s effort. It is really important to continue the cycle of life, it may sound like a responsibility, because our life, career, or work may depend on it. Just like what is happening now in Korea, where schools shut down due to a low number of students.
See you tomorrow!
Aki~
It is difficult to feel birthrate rises in reality because I am rare to see prenants women around me.
>>> It is difficult to feel that birthrate rises in reality because it is rare to see pregnant women around me.
Government and many municipalities tro ti support childbirth policies activiely with system and money.
>>> The government and many municipalities try to support childbirth policies actively with systems and money.
One is interesting that the upper class has many children and get marry early than the middle class.
>>> It is interesting that the upper class has many children and get marry early than the middle class.
Many young generation don\'t feel family\'s happiness or they regard more important value to enjoy their own pleasure.
>>> Many young generations don\'t feel family happiness, or they regard more important values to enjoy their own pleasure.
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