blahblahblah 180425

2018-04-26 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

There are so many things to learn nowadays. Jujitsu, Japanese language, photo shop, illustrator and so on... I have always had many things to do, but have'nt done manythings greatly. It's probably because I tend to get bored easily. I think learning English is almost only thing I do continuously.haha Jujitsu might be really helpful to strengthen my health and protect myself just in the case of emergency. From what I heard, Jujitsu is an only martial art for a girl to defend herself in her own. Recently many sexual crimes from unknown person has occurred time to time, and it's quite scary if you think it can happen to anybody including myself. I have a tazor in my pocket always, but I believe it's not going to be helpful if I'm not ready with it in hand or I can delay some minutes to bring the tazor from my bag or pocket by fighting physically or defending myself in case that the criminal captures me tightly or doesn't let me freely move. So that's why I'd like to learn Jujitsu.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Min!(\",)

I\'ve tried Aikido for a short time 10 years ago. I think it\'s excellent because after doing the warm-up exercise, I was already sweating. Try Jujitsu. I think you\'ll like it.(\",)

~T. Lynn

There are so many things to learn nowadays.

>> correct!
 Jujitsu, Japanese language, photo shop, illustrator and so on...

>> correct!
 I have always had many things to do, but have\'nt done manythings greatly.

>> I have been doing many things but I haven\'t done many great things.

It\'s probably because I tend to get bored easily.

>> correct!
 I think learning English is almost only thing I do continuously.haha

>> I think learning English is the only thing I\'m doing continuously.(\",)
 Jujitsu might be really helpful to strengthen my health and protect myself just in the case of emergency. 

>> Jujitsu might be really helpful to keep
 From what I heard, Jujitsu is an only martial art for a girl to defend herself in her own. 

>> From what I heard, Jujitsu is the only martial art where a girl can defend herself on her own.
 Recently many sexual crimes from unknown person has occurred time to time, and it\'s quite scary if you think it can happen to anybody including myself. 

>> Recently, many sexual crimes by unknown people have been occurring from time to time, and it\'s quite scary if you think it can happen to anybody including myself. 
 I have a tazor in my pocket always, but I believe it\'s not going to be helpful if I\'m not ready with it in hand or I can delay some minutes to bring the tazor from my bag or pocket by fighting physically or defending myself in case that the criminal captures me tightly or doesn\'t let me freely move. 

>>  I have a Taser in my pocket always, but I believe it\'s not going to be helpful if I\'m not ready with it in hand or I can delay some minutes to bring the Taser from my bag or pocket by fighting physically or defending myself in case that the criminal captures me tightly or doesn\'t let me move freely. 
 So that\'s why I\'d like to learn Jujitsu.

>> correct!

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·