Blind Side
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Today, I watched Blind Side. It is a movie about an African American guy. He was separated with his mom. When he started going to school in 18, SJ(Sean Junior) became friends with him by a short talk. Big Mike( African American guy, real name Michael) had no home so SJ's mom let him stay at their home and they became a family. Big Mike was bad at his studies So he gets C +,- things. However he is good at sports. So he studyed hard so he could go into the American Football team. At first he was the worst but he became the best now. This movie shows each of our family is very precious
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Hi Joey,
I actually haven't seen the movie yet, but I've heard so many good things about it. I might watch it this weekend. Take care!
-RJ-
Today, I watched Blind Side. It is a movie about an African American guy.
>>correct
He was separated with his mom.
>>correct
When he started going to school in 18, SJ(Sean Junior) became friends with him by a short talk.
>>When he started going to school at 18, he became friends with SJ (Sean Junior) by starting a short talk.
Big Mike( African American guy, real name Michael) had no home so SJ's mom let him stay at their home and they became a family.
>>correct
Big Mike was bad at his studies So he gets C +,- things.
>>Big Mike was bad at his studies so he usually gets C + and C- .
However he is good at sports. So he studyed hard so he could go into the American Football team.
>>However he is good at sports. So he studied hard so he could get into the American Football team.
At first he was the worst but he became the best now. This movie shows each of our family is very precious.
>>At first he was the worst but he became the best. This movie shows how our family is very precious.
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