Book report 3
학생이 쓴 원문
We do not knowing how can invesetor earned much or small money to invest to his company. Only we have view of systemical mechanism in fincancial market. I think that Auditor are as judge to maintain the market.
If some people took unfair play, Auditor give the caution. In case of, player took pretty unfair play was given yellow card or led card by judge. Some people do not want and disagree this judgement but to maintain the game effectively and usefull they could accept the judgement.
It is similar with the Aduit work. If Auditor did not doing that obejective judgement and action,
Various parties interested had damaged from how Auditors deal with the problem.
강사 첨삭
Well, in my opinion, investors use their critical thinking and strategies to invest in such companies it depends on their strategy on how to gain money. Maybe you will get an idea about that when you are working. It is hard to explain how because it's like you have to figure it out on your own.
Be careful with your spelling also.
Here are the corrections:
We do not knowing how can invesetor earned much or small money to invest to his company.
>>We do not know how investors earn that much or that small money to invest in his company.
>>Spelling: Investor ?not invesetor or investeor.
Only we have view of systemical mechanism in fincancial market.
>>We only know the systematical mechanism in the financial market.
I think that Auditor are as judge to maintain the market.
>>I think that an auditor is a judge. They maintain the market.If some people took unfair play, Auditor give the caution.
>>If some people are unfair then the auditor gives the caution.
In case of, player took pretty unfair play was given yellow card or led card by judge.
>>In that case, the unfair player is given a yellow card or led card by the judge.
Some people do not want and disagree this judgement but to maintain the game effectively and usefull they could accept the judgement.
>>Some people disagree with this judgment but, to maintain the game effectively and useful they accept the judgment.
>> Spelling: Judgment ?not judgement.It is similar with the Aduit work.
>>Correct!
If Auditor did not doing that obejective judgement and action, Various parties interested had damaged from how Auditors deal with the problem.
>>If the auditors did not do the objective, judgment, and action, various interested parties will be damaged from how the auditors deal with the problem.
>>Spelling: Objective ?not obejective.
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