Books Have The Power to Change The World
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If I wrote a book, I would like to write about how to treat people kindly. These days I have skepticism about the attitude of people. Because there are many people who do not have considerate hearts. For example, some people tend to exploit weak people. When I was a high school freshman student, I met a friend who thinks her friends as servants. She had great academic skills so many teachers and friends followed her. I could not understand her selfish attitude. Moreover, I could not understand why respect her as well. I also admit her great academic skills however, I never admit her authoritative attitude. In conclusion, If I had a chance to write a book, I would like to express that the most important thing is personality than one\'s academic skills. The reason why I want to write a book on this subject is that I believe books have the power to change the world.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Helena!
Thank you for doing your homework. I think if ever you will write this book, it will really be an eye-opener for others.
-T. Caitlyn
If I wrote a book, I would like to write about how to treat people kindly.
>> If I were to write a book, I would like to write about how to treat people kindly.
These days I have skepticism about the attitude of people. Because there are many people who do not have considerate hearts.
>> These days I have skepticism about the attitude of people because there are many people who do not have considerate hearts.
For example, some people tend to exploit weak people.
>> CORRECT
When I was a high school freshman student, I met a friend who thinks her friends as servants.
>> When I was a high school freshman student, I met a friend who treats her friends as servants.
She had great academic skills so many teachers and friends followed her.
>> CORRECT
I could not understand her selfish attitude.
>> CORRECT
Moreover, I could not understand why respect her as well.
>> Moreover, I could not understand why they respect her as well.
I also admit her great academic skills however, I never admit her authoritative attitude.
>> I also admit her great academic skills however, I never acknowledged her authoritative attitude.
In conclusion, If I had a chance to write a book, I would like to express that the most important thing is personality than one\'s academic skills.
>> CORRECT
The reason why I want to write a book on this subject is that I believe books have the power to change the world.
>> CORRECT
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