boyfriend or husband
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello~ Jennifer^.^
We talk about a guy who will be my boyfriend or husband.
I thought about my ideal guy(?) more because it's important.
I hope that he would be warm-hearted man also kind and thoughtful.
And I am kind of flighty and restless. So I want him to be careful and prudent.
In out looking, I prefer cute and soft man than muscle man.
But! It's important to activity. I love to hang around all over and also go on travel. Even i'm interested in living foreign country. But
I wonder If It's possible. Is it possible with Jenny whom you love advanture? I wonder how you think about it.
Anyhow, I have to meet a boyfriend first. I hope that he is going to appear in front of me as soon as possible he can.
Wish me luck.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
This topic was interesting for me too! I think most women like a guy who is warm-hearted, thoughtful, gentle and kind. My fiancé has all of those characters. I am not saying that he’s perfect, but he’s the most wonderful man I’ve met in my entire life. I’ve had previous relationships in the past but he’s just so different from all of them. That is probably the reason why I answered “yes” when he asked me to marry him. You asked me about the adventure I want to have and whom would I want to spend it with. Well, I have to say my fiancé of course! I think we both are outgoing and we love adventures. We have a plan to travel to Europe and Africa someday. I hope you’ll find the one and he finds you too! I wish you luck!
XOXO,
Jenny
Here are some revisions:
Hello~ Jennifer^.^
>>Correct.We talk about a guy who will be my boyfriend or husband.
>> We talked about my ideal guy for a boyfriend or husband.I thought about my ideal guy(?) more because it's important.
>> I thought about my ideal guy more because it’s important.I hope that he would be warm-hearted man also kind and thoughtful.
>> I hope that he would be warm-hearted, kind and thoughtful.And I am kind of flighty and restless. So I want him to be careful and prudent.
>> I am sometimes flighty and restless so I want him to be very careful and prudent.In out looking, I prefer cute and soft man than muscle man.
>> In appearance, I prefer a cute and soft guy than a muscle man.But! It's important to activity. I love to hang around all over and also go on travel.
>> But, it’s important that he’s active because I love to hang out and travel a lot.
Even i'm interested in living foreign country. But I wonder If It's possible.
>> I am interested to live in a foreign country but I am wondering if it’s possible.
Is it possible with Jenny whom you love advanture?
>>If it’s possible, Jenny, whom would you want to have an adventure with?
I wonder how you think about it.
>> Correct.Anyhow, I have to meet a boyfriend first.
>>Anyhow, I have to make a boyfriend first.
I hope that he is going to appear in front of me as soon as possible he can.
>> I hope we could find each other as soon as possible.Wish me luck.
>>Correct.
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