Boys and girls class
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Does your school separate boys and girls in classes?Our school doesn\'t.Some people say that schools should separate boys and girls in classes.But I totally disagree.But why?Here\'s why.First,we should know many friends . If we are separated,we will less friends because we can have only girl friend or boy friend!We can know less games because the girls or boys might know a game we don\'t.Second,we can have less ideas.Boys and girls can have many ideas.When we have a debate,we might get more fresh idea! if we have a problem,we can solve it by many ideas.Third,we can have a good relationship.As I said before,we can know many friends,So we can learn how to have a good relationship with boys and girls.We should have a good relationship with many people.Now,do you understand why l disagree that schools should separate boys and girls?It for can friends,ideas and relationship.It will be much better that way.What do you think?
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T. Matt
Does your school separate boys and girls in classes?
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Our school doesn\'t.
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Some people say that schools should separate boys and girls in classes.
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But I totally disagree.
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>> However, I totally disagree.
But why?
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Here\'s why.
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First,we should know many friends .
>>First, we can meet many friends.
If we are separated,we will less friends because we can have only girl friend or boy friend!
>>If we are separated, we will have less friends because we can only have girl friends or boy friends!
We can know less games because the girls or boys might know a game we don\'t.
>> We can be introduced to less games because the girls or boys might know a game we don\'t.
Second,we can have less ideas.
>>Second, we can have less ideas.
Boys and girls can have many ideas.
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When we have a debate,we might get more fresh idea!
>>When we have a debate, we might get more fresh ideas!
if we have a problem,we can solve it by many ideas.
>>If we have a problem, we can solve it by many ideas.
Third,we can have a good relationship.
>>Third, we can have a good relationship.
As I said before,we can know many friends,So we can learn how to have a good relationship with boys and girls.
>>As I said before, we can meet many friends, so, we can learn how to have a good relationship with boys and girls.
We should have a good relationship with many people.
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Now,do you understand why l disagree that schools should separate boys and girls?
>>Now, do you understand why l disagree that schools should separate boys and girls?
It for can friends,ideas and relationship.
>>It is because we can meet many friends, have a good relationship, and get fresh ideas.
It will be much better that way.
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What do you think?
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