Bravest moment of my life

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It is true that living alone is quite scary.
I am going through the same thing right now and I could definitely say that it\'s not easy.

However to some degree, I feel satisfaction from doing it because deep down I know that I could always make it on my own without the help of others.

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I think that bravest moment of my life was when I lived alone in the city which is not my hometown.

>> I think the bravest moment of my life was when I lived alone in the city which is not my hometown.

Because of my Internship, I had to live alone apart from my family.

>> Because of my Internship, I had to live alone and apart from my family.

It was my first experience in my life because I have lived with my family since I was born so I thought I would live with my parents before my marriage.

>> It was the first experience in my life because I have lived with my family since I was born so I thought I would live with my parents before my marriage.

Living alone, I had to pay the public utility charges and cook by my self.

>> CORRECT!

Even though I was sick, nobody washed the dishes for me so it made me sorrowful sometimes. 

>> CORRECT!
However, I felt I was getting grown up and fianlly I realized I can live independantly completely.

>> However, I felt that I was a grown-up and I finally realized I can live completely independent.

After internship, I came back my hometown and now live with my family again though, I am not afarid of living alone anymore.

>> After internship, I came back to my hometown and now live with my family again though I am not afarid of living alone anymore.

I aLready have been there before.

>> I already have been there before.
Therefore, bravest moment of my life was living alone.

>> Therefore, the bravest moment of my life was living alone.