Brazil, A Wonderful Country!
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I have been to Brazil two years ago in order to have a exchange program in a university in Sao Paulo.
I lived in Sao Paulo, the main economic city over the country.
While there are an old town and many vacant old buildings in the center of the city, there are also principal administrative buildings, banks, companies and embassy buildings.
And there is a district of Korean town which is located in the west of the city. It is called \'Bom Retiro\'.
It is quasi-Korea in Brazil. Many Korean imigrates are living there and having stores that sell the Korean food and materials and so on.
I usually visited the Korean stores to buy Korean Ramen. I really liked to visit there, the Korean supermarkets.
Visiting the Korean supermarkets was a kind of my trifling ,, safe and unique enjoyable hobby in Brazil.
Brazil is very big,,big ,,big. and has many sorts of culture like Afro-style, European style, etc.
I loved to meet my Brazilian friends. I made many unforgettable memories there.
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I have been to Brazil two years ago in order to have a exchange program in a university in Sao Paulo.
>> I went to Brazil two years ago for my exchange program in a University in São Paulo.
>> I went to Brazil two years ago for my exchange program in a University in São Paulo.
I lived in Sao Paulo, the main economic city over the country.
>> I lived in São Paulo, the main economic city in the country.
>> I lived in São Paulo, the main economic city in the country.
While there are an old town and many vacant old buildings in the center of the city, there are also principal administrative buildings, banks, companies and embassy buildings.
>> While there are old towns and many vacant old buildings in the center of the city, there are also principal administrative buildings, banks, companies and embassy buildings.
>> While there are old towns and many vacant old buildings in the center of the city, there are also principal administrative buildings, banks, companies and embassy buildings.
And there is a district of Korean town which is located in the west of the city.
>> There\'s also a Korean town which is located in the western part of the city.
It is called \'Bom Retiro\'.
>> CORRECT
>> CORRECT
It is quasi-Korea in Brazil.
>> It is a quasi-Korean in Brazil.
Many Korean imigrates are living there and having stores that sell the Korean food and materials and so on.
>> Many Korean immigrants are living there and have stores that sell Korean food and materials and so on.
>> Many Korean immigrants are living there and have stores that sell Korean food and materials and so on.
I usually visited the Korean stores to buy Korean Ramen.
>> I used to visit the Korean stores often to buy Korean ramen.
I really liked to visit there, the Korean supermarkets.
>> I really liked visiting Korean supermarkets.
>> I really liked visiting Korean supermarkets.
Visiting the Korean supermarkets was a kind of my trifling ,, safe and unique enjoyable hobby in Brazil.
>> Visiting Korean supermarkets was kind of trifling. It\'s a safe, unique and enjoyable hobby in Brazil.
>> Visiting Korean supermarkets was kind of trifling. It\'s a safe, unique and enjoyable hobby in Brazil.
Brazil is very big,,big ,,big. and has many sorts of culture like Afro-style, European style, etc.
>> Brazil is ginormous and has many sorts of culture like Afro-style, European style, etc.
>> Brazil is ginormous and has many sorts of culture like Afro-style, European style, etc.
I loved to meet my Brazilian friends.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: I loved meeting my Brazilian friends.
I made many unforgettable memories there.
>> CORRECT
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