Breaking a bad vice
학생이 쓴 원문
These days, playing video game is normal. But, when I was middle school student, playing games at amusement arcade was banned. I didn\'t know why. Maybe those days many people had though, video games give bad effects to students. I used to love playing games.
After school, I usually went to an amusement arcade. I couldn\'t stop to play games. But, I had known that, I must stop to go to an amusement arcade. One day, I decided not to meet friends who went to an amusement arcade with me. I made a declaration.
강사 첨삭
Hello Il [이름],
Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you.
Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)
These days, playing video game is normal.
>>> These days, playing video games is normal.
But, when I was middle school student, playing games at amusement arcade was banned.
>>> But, when I was a middle school student, playing games at an amusement arcade was banned.
I didn\'t know why. Maybe those days many people had though, video games give bad effects to students.
>>> I didn\'t know why. Maybe those days many people had thought that playing video games give bad effects on students.
I used to love playing games.
>>> CORRECT
After school, I usually went to an amusement arcade. I couldn\'t stop to play games.
>>> After school, I usually went to an amusement arcade. I couldn\'t stop playing games.
But, I had known that, I must stop to go to an amusement arcade.
>>> But, I knew that I must stop going to an amusement arcade.
One day, I decided not to meet friends who went to an amusement arcade with me. I made a declaration.
>>> One day, I decided not to meet my friends who used to go with me to an amusement arcade. I made a declaration./ I made a decision.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.