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Ciao!

~Teacher Marie~

Dear [Name] san,
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Hello. I am emailing you to say hello and to introduce myself to you.

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 My name is [Name] yui-dong.

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 I was recently moved as Olmetec franchise’s PM from sales planning team.

>> I was recently assigned as Olmetec franchise\'s new PM from the sales planning team.
 I am happy that you read my email to you.

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I’m responsible for Olmetec fanchise PM with Lee Jae-ho PM.

>> I am responsible for Olmetec franchise\'s product management, together with Product Manager Lee Jae-ho.
I’m glad to work with you.

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And I hope you would always understand me.

>> And I hope you could always understand me. 
I\'ll always exert more effort to work with you.

>> I\'ll always exert more effort in working with you.
 If you have any questions, please feel free to contact me.

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 Take care and have a nice day.

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I am looking forward to your visit next week.

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 So we are preparing agenda for the meeting with you.

>> So we are preparing the agenda for the meeting with you.
 If the agenda is fixed, I’ll share the contents with you.

>> When the agenda is set, I\'ll share the details with you.
 Furthermore I’m going to attend the JHFS next month.

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 So I’m wondering if I can get a detail schedule about JHFS from you in advance.

>> So I\'m wondering if I could get a detailed schedule of the JHFS from you in advance.
 I’ll appreciate to inform me about that.

>> I would appreciate any information that you could give me about that.
 Thank you.

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 With best regards

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 Hwang Yui-Dong

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