business email

Hello there [이름]!!
A FANTASTIC FRIDAY to you!

Thank you for sending this composition to me.

Your trust means so much to me. 

Please check out the corrections that I\'ve made below.

I\'ll see you again next week. 

Enjoy your weekend.

T. Kristel

T.Kristel, Please correct my business email sending to the sister university. 

>>>T. Kristel, please correct my business e-mail which I\'m sending to our sister university.

It was very difficult to express what I wanted to say.
>>>Correct!
We are very sorry to inform you that the period of winter camp should be shorten from 9 days to 8 days.

>>>We are very sorry to inform you that the winter camp period would be shortened from 9 days to 8 days only.

Most of our students who are in senior year get to have a schedule conflict with their training program for beginning teachers.

>>>Most of our senior students\' schedules are conflicting to their training program schedules. This training program is intended for beginning teachers.

The training program will run for 5 days from February 1 to 7, and it is compulsory to attend at least 80% of the classes.

>>>The training program is a 5-day program. It will start on the first of February and it will end on the 7th of the same month. It is compulsory for the students to attend at least 80% of the program.

In this situation, our 14 students of 20 students have to cancel the winter camp.
>>>In this case, 14 out of our 20 students had to cancel their winter camp schedule.
Therefore, inevitably, we changed the flight schedule as follows:
03FEB CI260 09:20(Taipei Songshan) - 12:45(Gimpo)
>>>Therefore, since it is inevitable, we changed the flight schedule to as follows:

03FEB CI260 09:20(Taipei Songshan) - 12:45(Gimpo)
We are very grateful if you could understand our situation and rearrange the schedule for the weekend.

>>>Correct!

I\'ll send you the changed final name list until next Tuesday.

>>>I\'ll send you the new final name list next Tuesday.