Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree?

2015-08-20 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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I disagree that businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Most important reason is health. Even if elder people have a great know-how, their body it too weak to do hard work. They also not skilled in using smart devices. Business must have follow and react the trend. However elder person can react faster than young person. Also, If business hire employees for their entire lives, unemployment rate will dramatically increase. Young people can't get a job. These are the reason that I disagree with this opinion.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]! ^^ Thank you for your wonderful essay. You are definitely getting better and better. ^^ There are just some minor slips but nothing too big.   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==       I disagree that businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. >> CORRECT Most important reason is health. Even if elder people have a great know-how, their body it too weak to do hard work. They also not skilled in using smart devices. Business must have follow and react the trend. However elder person can react faster than young person. >> The most important reason for this is health. Even if elderly employees have great know-how, their bodies are too weak for manual labor. They are also not skilled in using modern devices. However, elderlies can react faster than younger ones. Businesses should follow and act accordingly to trends. Also, If business hire employees for their entire lives, unemployment rate will dramatically increase. Young people can\'t get a job.>> If business also hire employees for their entire lives, the unemployment rate will dramatically increase because young people can\'t get jobs. These are the reason that I disagree with this opinion. >> These are the reasons why I disagree with this opinion.

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