cafe
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Nowdays some cafes are very famous for joined coffee and fresh bread.
They seem focus on developing of new bread flavor and desine of bread shape rather than coffee inselfs.
Young generation prefer delicous bread to tasteless rice.
But the competition aamong cafes become serious, maybe will occur bankruptcy.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Ms. [이름]!
I definitely agreed with your point. Cafe owners introduce new things that attract customers and the growing industry of cafe might lead to your sentence on the last part.
Thanks for sharing!
Aki~
Nowadays some cafes are very famous for joined coffee and fresh bread.
>>> Correct!
They seem focus on developing of new bread flavor and desine of bread shape rather than coffee inselfs.
>>> They seem to focus on developing new bread flavors and designs rather than the coffee itself.
Young generation prefer delicous bread to tasteless rice.
>>> Young generation prefers delicious bread to tasteless rice.
But the competition aamong cafes become serious, maybe will occur bankruptcy.
>>> But the competition among cafes becomes serious, which may occur bankruptcy.
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